Hello! I'm liking the game so far, but as learned from one of your other comments, this was translated from another language. If you'd like, I'd be happy to help go over the script and correct some of the grammar and misspellings to help polish up the game a little. :)
Alone in the World
Log in with your itch.io account to leave a comment.
Awesome little visual novel, took me about 2 hours to read aloud to my viewers on a livestream but that was with a lot of talk and interactions with my viewers! I'm guessing most people will be able to finish this reading it to themselves in 30 min to an hour. Well worth the time and certainly great for being "free"!
While the grammar and wording wasn't perfect, it delivered a great and super cute story that made me both laugh and made me think some pretty deep thoughts!
I loved it. I give this one a 8 out of 10.
If you want to watch my experience of this one, feel free to watch my livestream of it right here:
I`m really, really glad you enjoyed it! I made sure to watch the whole livestream. I gotta say I was really embarassed the whole time. Truth to be told, this was developed in only two weeks. I joined the Tyrano Jam a little bit too late and things got rushed from that point on. You are absolutely right about some things you said during the livestream. You guessed that the story was actually written in a different language, and that`s true. I wrote all of it in my native language (portuguese) before translating it to english. The writing process took me abou a whole week, and I had to rush the translation in only two days. As a result, there were a lot of missing words, bad phrasing and english mistakes I did not have time to correct.
There were a lot of things your stream taught me! The first was to take my time if I`m going to write something in another language. Even then, it will probably be better if I ask a native speaker to help me correct some mistakes next time. My english is, like you said, far from perfect, after all.
It`s also very fruitful to watch someone play something you made. You can see where you got things right, and where it could`ve been better. There are a lot of things I`d like to do differently if I had the time to. Well, guess I`ll just have to work harder on my next project. I hope you`ll look foward to it!
Thank you so much =)
Very good job.I liked the girl a lot!